ButtercupRose

Hey--- I'm here to review! :) Ok first of all I liked the way you started it with "Waking up in the middle of the night didn't bother me anymore." ...

Hey- I'm here to review! Lol Ok so I love how you describe Jonas in the begining, really great when you said "Jonas was a mix of many things. He ...

Very descriptive! Hauntingly sad, but beautifully written. It gives just the right amount of emotion to bring it to life. It makes the reader FEEL the emotion you are writing. ...

I really like how you described it! But you definitely should proofread it, I can't tell some of the things you are trying to say. It is a little confusing ...

Beautiful. Just a little confusing at times. It was unique and interesting. it kept my interest the entire time. But the stanzas are a little weird. I'm not sure if ...

I like the beginning, its very descriptive. But its a little too long and doesn't leave me hanging enough. If you posted the next part, I might not be as ...