Hello there! After reading your poem, I decided I'd leave my first review for it!
Like someone mentioned below, in your first stanza you give away the ending (that your best friend passes away), and I feel like that would have been better used to build tension through the poem.
Otherwise, I actually love this poem! It's sad and it definitely made me emotional just reading it. I feel like the way you added the peer pressure ("Do you want to be popular? Do you want to be cool?") made it relatable, in that many many teens face very similar pressures. I think your overall flow and choice to rhyme helped the poem, as well, despite what someone else said. Overall, you did a wonderful job making an emotionally haunting poem! I look forward to hopefully reading more of your work!
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