Buranko

Glad you liked it

Thanks for your review but I really want to point out the fact that metaphors don't have to be tangible, to be seen. I see that you are more on ...

Like the first stanza is a serious, colorless atmosphere but once music comes to help, everything vgets some color.

Awwww glad you liked it. I used guttural and hoarse just like you said, to show age and how would they affect the silence. However, I changed the tone of ...

The old tunes chime along with the younger tunes. Thanks for review

I love procrastinating until the last day before a deadline heh. It's a vicious cycle of working, getting work, procrastinating and working again

Hi star thank you for pointing out my little repetition there, I tend to avoid accidental repetitions of words but when it does happen it is because it's too subtle ...

Ayyy I love the fact that you identified the theme of each stanza. What I wanted to portray in the 3rd stanza is suffering but what you said is the ...

Aww thanks, glad you liked it

No problem, glad I could help

And without the it sounds even cooler "swan carving underneath his steps". What do you think

No no no don't remove swan. I said it would be cooler if you got rid of the verb. "the swan carving underneath his steps." instead of "the swan carving ...

"echoes the crash of my father%u2019s grand entrance stage right."(even though it is nicely written, it is a little too crowded in the sense that you added a little too ...

I'm glad to know you like my review. I was a little worried I might have been too critical and missed the point of the poem

Awww thanks for the awesome suggestions. English being my second language works a little different in mg head. While I consider my vocabulary to be pretty large I have difficulties ...