BrooklynWriter

EydisEy, I'm going to start with: I love it! It holds power and I can feel the intensity from the first line. However, there was a line I had a ...

Madison, To start, I love your tagline, it really drew me in. However, it didn't really connect with the first chapter, and I found myself looking for it. Also, and ...

Whoa, this is amazing. You really captured this car accident. It seemed to be a mysterious piece as well. While I was reading, questions began to present themselves to me. ...

A small country estate that lied *lay* right next to one of the largest pieces of land in the whole of England, was home to one of the bigger family’s ...

Grammar- Green Details- Red This is a true story that actually just recently happened. At the same time, this is also my first story to publish on YWS. so please ...

This is a very good poem... especially for a first love poem post. Trust me, my first post on YWS was a sappy, cheesy mess. By reading this, I can ...

Wow, that was powerful. I love your similism with serpents, evil, and friends gone bad. I also like the hope that is kept throughout the poem. But... Two evil serpents ...

Twit, Thanks for the link, I enjoyed this. I had a few issues with the beginning of the chapter. It took up a lot of time and, once you came ...

Hey, This is a very interesting piece. I saw the early signs of a good plot formation. But, I wasn't such a fan of the ending of this chapter, the ...

In green are the punctuation errors, in red is everything else. The land is falling apart, and Great Mother is calling you. There is only one choice, but You are ...

Hey K, Alright so I finished Mockingjay and went straight here. Now, as with everyones works, their was a few grammer and punctuation errors which I won't bother with since ...

Am I too lost to be saved? This is a lyric from an Evanescence song. Will the pain never end? It’s always there, constantly stabbing my heart like lightning in ...

Hey kaka, That was amazing!!!!!!!!! There were a few spelling errors like Sa5m and suppos but other than that no real problems. If you are thinking about turning this into ...

That was really interesting. Of course I didhave a few key problems with it. Like some of the grammer was a little off. Another is the speed at which her ...

All I can really say here is wow. The emotions in this poem are overwhelming. The whole thing really makes you think about whats going on. It is pressing. The ...