BrokenSkye

No, I don't mind at all :) Glad you liked it, I was a little worried with this because I am not one to rhyme, so this really means alot! ...

Hey Shadows! Thanks for being the first to comment on my piece! Very much appreciated! But I wanted to inform you of the ending being changed and if it is ...

Thank you for letting me know that there were words missing! Gosh, that is so embarrassing! That is a prime example of a late night mess up! But I am ...

Thank you for letting me know that there were words missing! Gosh, that is so embarrassing! That is a prime example of a late night mess up! But I am ...

Everyone who has commented so far, has said the same thing you have, that the ending is sad and would be better for her to live or escape. I took ...

I didn't start each line with a capital because the line above it ended with a comma, not a period. Thanks for you comment though, it is much appreciated.

Oh my gosh!! I didn't even realize and I read through it like seven times!! Haha, thanks soo much!!

I do agree with my last stanza, I am going to have to work on it a little more a review it some. Thanks :)

Yes, I was having so much trouble with that last line! I ended up writing that because, as you proved, I thought it would make the reader feel as though ...

Okay, yes, I put the word "light" in the first stanza on purpose. And I could not say that the light chases away the night because I had to write ...

Okay, yes, I put the word "light" in the first stanza on purpose. And I could not say that the light chases away the night because I had to write ...

Like I said in my description, I was using repetition, that is why I used an exclamation point at the end of those lines. I must have been typing too ...

I was having a lot of trouble with that stanza, not line, but what I did with all the others is I bounced from the matching stanza and line from ...

That is the most I can do with still telling my story and getting to the point. I hope you like it better this way!

I am working hard on making it shorter, I took out two stanzas and some lines so far, but I am still working on it. :) Thanks for your comment ...