BradenPowell

Instead of "I sit amongst everyone, wondering if I am the same or whether I was born on this planet or not.", maybe try something like this: I sit among ...

The first thing I noticed about this story, is that it is a single block of text. That's just a formatting issue though. Another thing is that after the full ...

Hi there, it's BRADEN! Flames burned, black smoke curling lazily in the sky, ashes floating down like snow, tainting the air with an acrid odor that made Argent, watching smugly ...

"They felt a burning hate for each other from the moment she walked into his third period english class." I like the way you set the scene here, immediately telling ...

This was really interesting. The musing style of this really drew me in. I just wanted to say before continuing that you should read R.A. Salvatore's The Legend Of Drizzt ...

Something that I noticed early on is the obvious lack of quotation marks. I don't know if this id deliberate or not, but it was a bit confusing. "Okay Gamma ...

Something I couldn't help noticing throughout the story is that for some reason, the writing style reminds me of a sort of older story. Written last century if you know ...

1. The introduction was really intruiging. The fight scene made me instantly want to know more. The way that you went straight from there into the purpose of the orphanage, ...

That first paragraph was interesting. The way that this is structured really compliments the flow of the words. That last line, "Maybe I ran too fast." just leaped out and ...