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hahaha! I loved it! It rhymed and flowed well, it sounded natural, like you write stuff like this everyday [i don't doubt you do] Punctuation was great, spacing was good ...

Even though you've already showed this to me in class, I want to tell you [agian] that I love it. oh yeah, i'm glad you changed the line format, before ...

Aww that was sad -_- I liked it, but you need to fix the punctuation and spacing in there, but other than that, I thought it was really good! ^.^ ...

I've never been much of a hiku [or however you spell it] fan, but I liked this one. I know this isn't much of a critique as it is more ...

It was alltogether good, you staryed from the topic a little, but even the best of writers do time to time. keep writing! -Brooke

Its actually because I wrote [I'll try to make my life worthwhile, you'll dampen this enthousiasim by pouring sarcasm all over the place] it's basically saying that I'm getting enthousiasm ...

I know this won't help you improve as a writer, but I really liked it. It had apoint, and delievered the message the whole way through (except maybe the last ...

That was really nice! with me being a big fan of horses and all, you did a great job with the metaphors and similes, and they were very creative 7/10 ...

This is really good, keep it up ^.^