The mighty hunter stalks the wood.
Her steps quick and light.
Blending in perfectly like a patch of moonlit forest floor.
Her ears like radars pick-up a small sound.
A mouse looks up warily as she creeps by.
Her prey a young rabbit doesn't notice a sound.
To busy munching on dewy grass to think about danger.
An explotion of silver and black is the hunter as she leaps.
Her prey falls to her mighty claws.
A kitten wakes-up during the night.
"Mommy," she says "I had the most wonderful dream..."
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once agian proof of how much you like warriors, i loved this one of your best!!!
Very nice. You need some commas, and it might make it flow better if every line doesn't end in a period. I love how you call the cat "an explosion of silver and black." The last lines are perfect, sweet and magical.
By the way, have you read Warriors? I'm just making an educated guess because your name is Moonclaw_Warrior_of_Night. If you haven't read Warriors, you have an uncannily coincidental username. Who's your favorite character?
Even though you've already showed this to me in class,
I want to tell you [agian] that I love it. oh yeah, i'm glad you changed the line format, before it was VERY confusing!!