Boni_Bee

Hey thanks for the reviews!! Sorry I haven't been on YWS lately, so didn't get back to this sooner. I'm afraid I don't have much time for writing lately, but ...

Thanks heaps for doing a review Miss Ching! I really appreciate it :)

Honestly, I can't find this group! Is it still going?

Second half critiqued :) Krillia opened her mouth but Kron interrupted, “Hush!” He pressed a finger to his lips, “We’ll talk outside. Come on.” He led her outside the door. ...

I agree, that is a beautiful poem!! :D

Wow, this is amazing!! I will post a critique tomorrow, but just wanted to say that this is an amazing story and I can't wait for more!! :D

Thank you Kris :)

Thankyou for your comments, stilltyping! :) I'll work on that idea, about adding more lines... :)

Thanks, Jennafina! :) I'll put some more up this week hopefully...

Thanks Sohini! :D I fixed that up...

Wow, that is an awesome story! I think it captured the theme really well! It is a very emotional piece...great job! :D

You should really space out the paragraphs... After the first sentence, you need a comma after realistic and the ". Mr should have a . after it. Mr. But this ...

Thanks... :) It wasn't meant to be a sonnet, because it wouldn't work! lol It is just a silly rhyming poem...lol

Thanks Griff! :D

Ok :) Thanks for your opinion