Blue_Rubies

This is fantastic start to the story. On of the most important parts of writing is to show, and not tell, the reader what is happening. You have done this ...

I love the theme of this poem! I can really connect with it, and it's so simple and beautiful! Just one issue.. the lines Every single voice Is drowned out ...

As mentioned before, the poem starts off rhyming, then all of a sudden stops. This disappoints the reader, as the first stanza has set them up for rhyming, and they ...

I believe that this story succeeds where other short stories don't in that it gets to the climax very quickly and the introduction is not too long. The descriptions were ...

I love it! Great use of alliteration and personification there. It may just be a missing apostrophe but some of the lines don't make much sense to me Rattling on ...