BigBadBear

Thanks guys. I'll be posting the next chapter sometime tomorrow! BBB

Koko - Thanks. There are two boys: Lyre and Arnold. I'll go back and try and see what I can do that make that less confusing. Star - Thanks for ...

Hey! I just wanted to tell you that this is really good. Your rhyming fits in really good and there is nothing really to change. I hope that you continue ...

lol this is good. Only one typo: “Here, Pil.” Pil should be Phil.. Well, this was a really good start. You characters have good humor and things like that, so ...

Crap! I couldn't see anything wrong with this...darn you! come on...not even one mistake...crap! Well, this was really good. You are a good that a word? anyway, you can write ...

Hey, thanks guys. Butter In My Hair kinda took me down, and I haven't written any more since. Thanks for commenting guys. You've made my day better! BBB

Mary is still hanging around because she loves Christian more than anything else in the world. You see, she would give her life for him, as you see later on ...

Never mind, I'll do the huge critique today. Well, here I go!!! Note: I am not trying to be rude or anything, so if you disagree with something, just PM ...

No, please continue. I want to get this picture perfect!

Oh. Ok. Now it makes sense. Well, I don't have anything bad to I love your book! your #1 fan because I forgot to say it last time... BBB

Uh...how did it remind you of Brother Bear? That's strange. Not how I would put the ending...

Whoa...it's like the circle of life, ha. Great job! Really sad thought. Sad, but true. Things happen like this all the time. Great job BBB

Hahah. I loved it. Just old Fangala writing more of her hilarious comedies! I'm off to read the second part! This is fantastic, and WAY too funny! I love it! ...

wasn't? I found it that bad?

I really liked this. I don't know what to say. Sometimes, things seem a tad unreal. Like pinching babies...ahah. Anyway, good job. Just look over it and you'll see everything. ...