BigBadBear

Hey! Again, wonderful. Yeah, it is kinda rushed, but I mean, whose isn't? If yours isn't then bite me. lol anyway, I loved it. You create suspense, and like the ...

Holy cow. You are just like pure talent. This story totally captivated me. I really like how you say like, "Just a litlle bit of Faith remained in her arms." ...

Hm.. Interesting. I really liked this. Again, you put your mind to work and create this.. I like it the same as I did Chapter One. I always seem to ...

Hey! I like this. It is short and simple, and leaves you wanting to know more. I like how you stated that it seemed like summer had just began, because ...

Oh my gosh! This so cool! It grabbed me from the start! Totally mysterious. I couldn't find anything wrong with it. I just loved it! lol There was only some ...

Hey! Fantastic story! I only thought a couple things were wrong: Ok, place yourself in Jack's Mother's shoes. Would you really let your 18 year old ask a girl to ...

Hey! I didn't cry, but I seriously thought about it. When Harry walked into the forest..with his parents, Serious..and all of them..oh gosh...it's sad. But I kinda had a suspicion ...

Wow! I really liked this! I thought it was clever and exciting. But, (you don't have to add this if you don't wanna) I think you should put where it ...

Wow. You continue to freak me out. I can't wait to keep reading. Well, at the very last part where it said that you have reached the devil, I thought ...

OH MY GOSH! That was the FREAKIEST chapter I have ever read! I cannot believe it! You put it exactly the way a reader wants it, to the point and ...

Hey! It is a great story, but I am not sure what you mean by when you said you need help ending and beginning a paragraph. Do you mean like ...

Hey! Great script. Like kitty said, your charactors sure had lots of good dialoge and it was just great! I like the idea of a 'more than pefect, but yet ...

Whoa... awesome! I don't agree that it was bland.. In fact, it was awesome! It grabbed my by surprise, and it really makes you wonder what the heck is going ...

Hey! This is a good start; very intriguing. There was only a couple of things that I noticed, and I'll point them out. The guards flipped a switch, and now ...

Ok, good. This story better not be over. I mean... come on! Gosh, it was so flippin good. There were somethings about it that I didn't like. Rushed. It felt ...