BigBadBear

Hey! I loved this! It was really great! Your diologue seemed all right, but not the best. Your grammar was simply beautiful. The only thing that I can find fault ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! I'm glad that you have found out how to post and everything. Ok, make sure that you double space between each paragraph, because it makes it ...

*bursts out laughing* Ok, I have to tell you: You have created pure brilliance!!! Ahhh! I loved it! You add the perfect amount of humor and everything that you need ...

Whoa... Just telling you >> this is REALLY good! I loved it! The only thing that you need to do different is SPELL the words out, not WRITE them like ...

Hey! This was a great poem. I liked it. "As voices long dead rejoice through great song." This part 'fine song' just doesn't fit. You should take fine out completely. ...

Oh my gosh...I hate you! Why did you have to leave at that spot? You HAD to hold me in suspense huh? Grrrr... Well, I loved it. Everything about except ...

well here it is! i have to admit im not so sure how this chapter will be responded to, i think i did ok but not that many exciting things ...

Hey! Unlike Cade, I liked this. It had a nice ring to it, all though the Love is...got kinda repetitive. That was the point you were driving for, no? Anyway, ...

Hey! Well, yeah, I was wondering how you pronounce Deuce. I was having a hard time with that. And as for the Native American names, pick something that the reader ...

Hey! I really liked this, I have to say. I really got bothered because I didn't exactly get 'hooked'. I know that it'll take some time, and I think that ...

Hm...I liked it. Really short, but this could be a VERY interesting book. Also, only use three dots right here " ready to fire.............." It should be, "ready to fire..." ...

Holy....werecat! This is again, amazing! I can't believe that you could write something so...so...good! Lol, I mean, this was incredible. Your descriptions are so vivid and realistic...and the part ab

Hey! This was not how I expected it to end. Ron killing Harry *cries* Well, anyway, I didn't find it too believable. Right here: ""He's under the Imperius Curse!" she ...

Ha. I agree with Fangala because this sounds like Maximum Ride, and I loved it. I'm surprised that you could write like that and not have read it! Well: there ...

Wow. That was really cool. There were a couple things that bugged me. First of all, puncutation. I know that most poems don't use it, but I think that this ...