BenFranks

Hey there, I think the most interesting thing about this poem of yours is the topic. In cultural poetry that rebels against something, like you seem to be doing here ...

Hey there, as requested: Naturally, I'm going to start with the language. I liked it a lot, it was very flowery, very impressive and very decisively chosen. Although it would ...

Hey there Kyousuke, here as requested. Sorry you've been waiting for this review a while, but I hope it helps all the same. My suggestions, comments and improvements will be ...

Hey there! My first impression of this poem was that the rhythm was comfortable but the feel you portrayed was a bit mixed. Such as in your first stanza you ...

hello! I liked the images of this poem, that definitely showed us where you're coming from, even if they are quite surreal and taking contrasts to the extreme - I ...

Hey there! The natural rhythm created in your poem by using the couplets start to build a very comfortable pace for the reader, so I actually really enjoyed that part. ...

Hey there! Okay, you say this "isn't that good". The problem with modesty is it doesn't work when people realise it's a lot better than they're letting on. This is ...

Hey there! The best bit about this was how you set the piece. With the period/full-stop at the end of every line in the first 5 stanzas, the reading is ...

Hey there! I'd agree with the others that this is original, but I've read your other poem, so I'mjust going to say it's clear that you have your own style, ...

Too personal. Ahh, that old nut, eh? Well, I believe this is a letter to your best friend, am I right? Well, in that case this comment proves you've aced ...

Hey there! If I'm honest, the content of this poem is messy. It's readable but that's merely because you've structured it well. Either what you're trying to say is too ...

Hey there! So, once again I was drawn in by your colourful use of language which is inevitably appealing to any fellow literate. Although I have to admit that sometimes ...

Hey there! This is definitely well written for a start! The perspective you've written it from makes it a lot easier to imagine the imagery you come up with and ...

Hey there! Well, I personally think the main thing that this poem needs work on is the way it's punctuated. I actually really enjoyed the feelings that you brought across ...

Hey there fixed! What I love about this is the rhythm and the subject. It starts off sounding quite bouncy and humerous, it's probably due to the syllable rhythmic vibe. ...