BenFranks

Hey there! This opening is excellent: Love and sadness, An undeniably perfect pair, Not only is it true, but it's convincing -- so if your reader didn't beleive so, they're ...

Hey there! I'm Ben. May i suggest a thorough edit? For grammar, punctuation and mis-types. Anyway, the content! Like Firestarter has mentioned the way you've religiously kept to the rhyming ...

Hey there! I have to say I love this! Especially the way you've so religiously kept to the rhyming pattern that you produce lines such as this: filling the world ...

Wow, this was quite gripping in terms of the mystery and dark feel of it. I don't usually take to this type of poetry but I really enjoyed yours and ...

Hey there! I'm Ben, I haven't read your other parts so excuse any errors I make about plot! :) Anyway my thoughts to your story! Firstly, you have a tense ...

Wow you're a genius of script dialogue! That was incredibly FUNNY The way you've started this is ace: J.K Rowling: This is all your fault, you know. Stephenie Meyer: *whines* ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS. Anyway, about the poem. I love the shortness of it. It's crisp, to the point, vivid and has a settling rhythm. It's well structured and ...

Hey there! I think you need to work on the first stanza of your poem and bring some more vivid imagery into it and create that grip or emotional effect ...

Hello! I'm Ben and I'll be giving you a review today :) Lone Wolf Preface Where the black sky touches the white snow I (interesting, but I'm not sure if ...

Wow, I think this is brilliantly well written! I can't really comment on the technical side of this, as I'm no poet, but image wise you've conveyed vivid images continuously ...

Hey there JSPike! I thought this poem was actually really well-written, especially your beginning! By the way: Not too good with poetry so I'll be reviewing the content, message and ...

I did not cry when I went to Auschwitz, I did not weep and I did not sob. Not even the fingernail etchings could bring a tear. Nor the hollow ...

Hey Fixed! I'm Ben, love this piece! Unusually at the start I found myself thinking you were writing about a gun-shooter and not a hoop-shooter so I loved the feel ...

Hey there Amaryllis, my review buddy! Haha, I loved your prologue so I was very happy to see that you've posted Chapter One! Anyway, here are my thoughts and suggestions: ...

Everyone loves you Eddie. I love this poem. Very well done. You're a genius :) My Favourite stanza...? Hmm, *ponders in thought*. I think it'll be this one: From inflamed ...