BenFranks

Hey there anonymoussoul7, welcome to YWS. Anyway, your poetry is one of those rare gems that has both a perfect rhythm and a confident and sustained portrayal of images and ...

Hey there Lena, here for the review. Okay, my suggestions/comments are in blue italics. When a man is immersed in complete and utter darkness it is the time in which ...

'Ullo and welcome to YWS :) Right with this poem I think that you've got a very good notion for good vocabulary and portrayals it's just a little frail and ...

Hi there! Okay, the meaning and narrative of this poem stand out as the positive things here because it's gripping and has something some of us can familiarise ourselves with, ...

Hey! What a start this is! I live in a land of sorrow, Where all I feel is pain.

Hey There. I enjoyed the concept of this poem, as the subject is admirable. Your cliches are well-placed to effect as opposed to being a problem and I think the ...

Hey there Absolutely adore this line, despite the mis-spelling: Callesed, strong hands snatch me from my fall And I laughed at your ending because I thought this was part of ...

Hey there Minister! I love this piece and I need to congratulate you on the structure of it. It's written very well in the sens that you've kept control of ...

Hey there! I love the content of your poetry and the way you narrate this as if they were words spoken from a reader, but I would say the tone ...

You speak to me, and I speak back, but do not meet your eyes. You think its odd that when we speak I tell you nought but lies. You ask ...

Hey there! I read your article and you do, like the others said, mention some good points, but it lacks the captivation to have any real affect. I think that ...

It's a good start and can see where it's going so I think you've got a strong plot idea behind it. I like the dialogue, just at times it can ...

Hey there Minister :) You gave me some feedback on my works so it's only fair I return the favour! :D Right, I think here you've written subconsciously in a ...

Hello, :) Well-written and well-portrayed. Can't really nitpick since it's a thing most of us can relate to and you've let us take away the affect so there's no question ...

Hey there! Right, I think in terms of nitpicking you should take a look at Winie's suggestions, however my feedback of this poem is pretty positive. I think you've structured ...