Bella

Thanks for all that! I've been looking back on this one a lot lately, and I think I'm going to go back a rewrite it soon. I wrote this one ...

I liked this, but I thought it was kind of confusing. I know a few people have already said this, but I think character developement, or some moer background information, ...

I really like this. It's one of those really cute short stories that we all love. I'm not so sure about the tense though, but that's probably just me.

I like fits you. I did that to my boyfriend the first time he said "i love you"...but we still talked after words...he didn't spazz out...we'd only been goign out ...

Hmm...I like the general idea of the words, but it didn't seem to flow very well. Also, it was rather long...but that could just be me. Happy writing!!! ~Bella~

Honestly, I thought the idea was great until I got into it. It just doesn't seem as original as I had thought, and it didn't flow all that well. I ...

I didn't notice any mistakes or anything, and you're writing is...aluring? For lack of a better word. I don't know the plot, but I like these 2 chapters.

hmm...this is interesting, for lack of a better word. What does "Je ne sais quoi" mean? You have a wide vocabulary, but some of this is hard to understand, in ...

It doesn't make any sense to me. There's not really a form to it, and it's very...random. Usually i get a lot of emotion from poetry, but I didn't get ...

It seems like one of those things that at first glance says absolutely nohting, but that when reread, is so unbelievably full of emotion. I like it.

i fixed these typos too! =)

I changed the typos and stuff. =)

obviously you've already been critiqued so I'll just say that I like the general idea, but that the rythm is kinda off.

oops..ignore my earlier post! I didn't realize that this was a fanfic... =)

these are good books...how do fanfics work?