BadNarrator

I think you have the bones of a good poem here. my biggest concern is that its too abstract. I don't mean abstract like a Picasso painting, but abstract in ...

Most prologues are boring and unnecessary. The reader finds him or herself wishing that the author would quit messing around and get to the story already. Not to sound rude ...

Hey: I'll be reviewing your story today. I'll use strikeout for parts I suggest you omit, [brackets] for things to add, blue for stuff to change, red for the stuff ...

Hello retrodisco666. I'm BadNarrator and I'll be critiquing your story today. Since it was such a short story I didn't feel the need to go through it word for word ...

Hey jashbagabaldo. So, stream of consciousness, huh? Not necessarily my favorite style of prose but I've read some in the past that was written quite well. Let's see how you ...

Hey kakagirl. I'll be reviewing your story today. Just so you know I'm using strikeout for parts I suggest you omit, [brackets] for things to add, blue for stuff to ...

Hey jpen510 I'm using strikeout on parts I suggest you remove, blue on stuff to change, [brackets] on stuff that confused me, red on stuff that confused me and for ...

Hey carboncore. I'm Bad Narrator and I'll be reviewing your story. I'm using strikeout for parts I suggest you omit, [brackets] for things to add, blue for stuff to change, ...

Dear, wickedwonder Your welcome in advance for the review. Contest Entry! for Yuriiko's Postsecrets Contest Enjoy! I'll attach the picture at the end. Marissa~ I know you hate me. I ...

I'm probably not your target audience but I need something to critique so I'm doing this story. Sorry: The grammar in here is probably terrible, considering I didn't have WORD ...

Look: I'm gonna critique this post but I want to get two things straight. First of all, prologues are not short stories. Second of all, I really, really hate prologues. ...

Well my first impression would be to say that this is not a short story, but a prose poem. However I've read several stories in the past which seem to ...

Hey Tigersprite You are never more alive than the moment before you die. These words echo through my mind as her scent fills my nostrils, as my nose meets the ...

This is Bad Narrator critiquing your chapter: Hey, it's Drago. This is my attempt at a suspense/thriller. I hope you enjoy the story. The blood flowed so smoothly , pooling ...

I stared at the girl in the mirror, she didn’t look any different. She still had thin, long blond hair, pulled back into a ponytail, just like every other day. ...