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I really appreciate this for its free, stripped-bare quality. It didn't feel forced, or like you were trying to get too creative, and yet you've perfectly communicated an experience many ...

Hey there! :) I agree with herbgirl: original idea, great choice of topic, but figure out what story you want to tell with it. Is it just "it's not my ...

Thanks for the reviews, guys! I made some edits to take what you suggested into account... P.S. I wanted to make this three stanzas but I don't know how to ...

Hi babydollblues! Interesting subject matter! It's something very relatable but, as Morrigan says, rather taboo and not often tackled. That makes this poem worth polishing! :D I agree with everything ...

Hi there! I like the rhythmic quality, like I could fall asleep to it around a campfire, or dance to it. I wanted more connection between the hands and the ...

Hi there! I agree with what's been said already. You've got some great images glimpsed through a fog of abstraction. I particularly like "we stare into the bridges of our ...

Thanks Harshita! :)

Thanks for the review, rbt00!

Love where this takes us! And I completely agree with the sentiment. I also agree with Cailey that the periods at the end of each line were very off-putting, but ...

Thank you! I really appreciate the review! :)

Thanks! That's really helpful feedback. Glad you like it!

Thanks guys! Yeah, I think you're both right, the last stanza doesn't really fit. Maybe it belongs in a different poem but not here. Navita, I agree with you about ...

Hanging off your words here. Are you sure part 3 won't be up until tomorrow? Don't know if I can wait that long!

Thanks so much for clearing that up for me! :D And thank you, too, for being so sweet and kind about it; you'd make a fine teacher--just ask your friends ...

Thanks, Areida! :D Yeah, I think that pretty much describes its intentions. -Sophie