Azila

Thank you all so much! canislupis>> I actually was thinking of Zalti's hotel a little when writing this, combined with a motel we stayed at in New Hampshire. And sorry ...

I'm about to edit this using your suggestions, so if you want, I can PM you once I edit it and I'll probably add some more, too. Sure, Monki! PM ...

Thank you so much, both of you! I greatly appreciate your criticism. This is an experimental piece, so I love to hear what you think. ChernobyllyInclined>> You are right. Jason ...

Hello, Wolf -- I've returned for more! :twisted: Nitpicks Mrs. Watson called tonight. About a half hour ago, my mom had come tramping up the stairs, red-faced and angry. I'm ...

Anorexia is commanly called Ana among anorexics, just as their is death and the person Death if you see what I mean, sorry for any confustion. And I missed out ...

I think this was supposed to be posted as a review here . I'll see if I can get a Mod to lock this thread. ~Azila~

I'm back. :twisted: -Nitpicks- I will not listen to any of them, I thought. I will ignore them; they can’t hurt me today. Today, I’ll become one of them. Thoughts ...

I'm back! I thought of a few things I would like to say... Firstly, I have to disagree with KJ (sorry, hon!). The scene with Tara in the end really ...

Hi, Andy! I'm back. :twisted: -Nitpicks- They were tiny mirrors that fell, cracked, and splashed the world that was beneath the clouds. Either you should delete the bold part, or ...

Hello! I have returned. :twisted: -Nitpicks- Jo had been doing a lot of thinking about David lately… You can just say "she" rather than "Jo" here--I think it would be ...

Hello! I told you I'd come back, and I have. "I'll send ye to Davy Jones' locker and plunder yer coffer, ye salty blow-fish." The lieutenant growled... This should be ...

I've been mulling over your plot for the last few days and thought of some flaws that I though I'd point out: 1. Language. If Derik's getting one woman from ...

The short style thing was sort of weird, I know, I kind of felt that that was how Victoria should speak so maybe I should write it in First Person? ...

Millie had dressed, finished her breakfast, and was shrugging into an old coat, when Ezra stumbled out of the bedroom into the main room of the farmhouse. I don't think ...

Let's end this thread. If anyone wants to talk about this short story or anything else, just PM me. I think there's enough said here for now, though. If you ...