Published April 16, 2008
1) does it draw my attention?
yes it does. it was very interesting, but the vocabulary was just a little bland. I think what drew me in the most was you attacking Mr. Duckworth.
2)Character Development?
She seems very interesting. Somehow reminiscent of a certain someone, but not too much. Just a taste.
3)Other thoughts?
burritos. and I really like your writing.
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I think this was supposed to be posted as a review here.
I'll see if I can get a Mod to lock this thread.
~Azila~
Wtf??? i have absolutely NO clue wht ur talking about
AH! Everyone! This is supposed to be attatched to the "Yarn-prologue"
Me: -___- attacking Mr. Duckworth was self defense of my writing, this is not yet a good working piece for me, so I was working on it. And still am! So therefore Mr. Duckworth shouldn't be allowed to read it in my prescence.