Azila

Hiya! Well, I told you I'd deliver--now I am. :wink: The color suited him as well, making his pale skin a little less noticeable and bringing out his dark blue ...

I really don't have much to say, considering this is so short and grammatically-sound. The only suggestion I have is that you add a bit more description--sensual description. You don't ...

Heya, Mizz iceberg! The oil sizzled and crackled has I dumped in the rice, letting a puff of steam up clouding my glasses. I think that last part should either ...

Hello, there! I see you're new to the YWS: welcome! But we do have a rule here, that you make a couple reviews on OTHER PEOPLE'S pieces before posting your ...

Remember I told you to PM me when you post more? Well, you didn't. *grumble* i wanted to get here before everyone else. :( Oh well... next time? ^_~ Penelope's ...

Hi, Keek! Do you mind if I try my hand at critiquing this? Why thank you -- my pleasure. :D It looked up to the sky, twin daughters of the ...

Hello! Nitpicks first. There is only one thing I can and will now say to everyone I love. "Death is only the beginning." The period after "love" should be a ...

Hiya, Cal! I'm afraid I might not have much to say, considering that Suz and Sam have already gotten here before me. I shall do my best to give a ...

Hey, Sokool! I love this story, I just had to tell you. :D Anyway, I'll go more into that later. Nitpicks first: Everyone was running around, unsure of what to ...

Hiya! I just HAD to review this, because I live next-door to an old cemetery and... yeah. Anyway, nitpicks first: Is it really that strange to visit a graveyard when ...

Without slowing down she barrelled through the door and came to a skidding stop within the building. There should be a comma after "down" and also, where I cone from ...

Hello, there! Because you're NOT entering this into the contest, I thought I'd give it a review. :D Nitpicks first, overall views after. I was a good distance back from ...

I agree with Elephantwalrus: you have a lot of emotion here, which is a very good start. But why stop there? Why not go on, and show us more imagery? ...

Hi, Scribe! I go to many places, several times a year, to help with the vexation. I'm not sure "vexation" is the word you're lookin' for... To the best of ...

Hi, Penguin! Nitpicks first: Cold perfection stretched across her face, broken only briefly, by those eyes. Either you should delete the comma after "briefly" or you should make it into ...