Azila

Hiya! The crying smilies worked--as always. :D Abruptly the suited back stopped moving, and Penelope helplessly felt her legs keep walking. Comma after "abruptly." ...this is it, I'm going to ...

Hello, Aedomir! Soon however, life would erupt and the last breath would be taken ere it plunges into mortal slumber. Shouldn't that be "plunged?" Also, I think there should be ...

Hello! Like I told you, I'm not very knowledgeable when it comes to poetry, but I hope this helps nonetheless. I was there to see them ruin their world. I ...

Can you please get rid of the "pre" feature on this? it is hard on the eyes and (in my opinion) completely unnecessary. If you fix that, and PM me ...

I wrote a piece called Olivia, so I just HAD to review this. :D Also, my Olivia is a quiet girl who's always alone... but she likes it that way, ...

Okay, then... April fools? The thunder cackled above, and lighting shoot down to the ground, flashing and banging in an impressive display of natural power. Should be "shot" Apparently he ...

Yeah, I was about to "complain" about the length... So post the whole thing! XD Also, make sure you use a spell-checker or something, because those mistakes Periwinkle noticed were ...

This is really short, but I'll see what I can do. :P As Curiosity crashed on the chair a surprised squeal stole through the air and a small cat jumped ...

Hello! Brace yourself for the critique of a lifetime, mortal! :twisted: -Nitpicks- It’s weird to see the streets of this city again. "Weird" is an extremely weak word. Don't put ...

Hi, Em! I did my best imagining laying on my back, fists full of my soft carpet. I think that should be "lying." I write about fairies, how they are ...

Hello! The mass of papers and books, which crowded the desk, rattled with fear. This would read better as "The mass of papers and books crowding the desk rattled with ...

Hi, Swottielottie! Nitpicks first. That was why it was better to stay in doors away from them. "Indoors" is one word. She still learned things though. There should be a ...

Hi, Camille! You know as well as I do that I'm extremely unexperienced in poetry... so my review probably won't help at all, but I just had to review this ...

Hello, there! Nitpicks first, then I'll tell you what i think of it overall after. “Dance as if no one were watching, sing as if no one were listening, and ...

Hiya, Lizzy! Joeducktape seems to have found all the flaws, but I'll try to make a helpful review anyway. :D Suddenly, the phone went dead but unfortunately my mind didn't ...