Awake

Wow, Jester, wow! That is what I call adventure! It was so real! My heart was pumping the adrenaline rush as the countdown got closer and as the action escalated ...

That was beautiful! You used so much imagery in every thing - oh, it was magnificant! I could feel the helplessness and dispare and the isolation. Though I thought that ...

Personally, I don't like to go far in to spelling nitpicks and stuff, so i think the other guys got the majority of that. This really grabbed my attention. As ...

Hey Babe, Loved it! Bea is really cute and funny! This reminds me of some one.... :P ! Anyway, I didn't see any spelling errors and grammar looks fine but ...

Hello Ballet dancer, This is a beautiful piece! I love the metaphor of running! the man running away and the young boy running right in to it. I also loved ...

Hello, It's a nice idea for an intro but executed poorly. Your ideas portrayed of vampires is way too stereotypical. Creating your own description of vampires would make it your ...

Hey Dark Eyed Pixie, It was a really good start. After reading the intro (I guess that's what it is), I am pulled in. There where just few nitpicks but ...

Hello, Long time no see... well read. This is a really good chapter, I wished it could have been longer! I loved the little suspense in the beginning as the ...

Hello Dark Eyed Pixie, I would love to give yo a detailed long review about how much you've dragged me in to your work but at the moment I should ...

Hello, I'm in a rush but I wanted to give a quick review! :) thedelphinater did a good review and there isn't much else to be said. I definitely agree, ...

Hello Mars, Well... to say the least you have something very interesting going on. I had never read a one sided conversation before. It's almost like your in the persons ...

dommy, I have to say, you have a very interesting story going on... I've read all the chapters so far and couldn't pick out anything different from what is already ...

HI kris, Very interesting, I had to read it twice. It appears pretty and sweet in the beginning, beautiful middle and manipulative and to me, slightly aggressive in the end. ...