Autumn

Overall I enjoyed reading this, it was interesting and gripping. :D It could use a bit of work though to make it better, here are a few suggestions from me: ...

This is really good! =] I haven't read DoaV so I can't really make a comparison but it definately seems to have promise and made me want to read more. ...

Overall, I really enjoyed this, great work! My only problem was that I got pretty confuzed in some parts, especially in the opening few paragraphs so maybe they could be ...

'As I did, I caught the barest hint of a reflection in his eyes, and I wondered.' This part needs to have some more explanation; I don't really understand what ...

Punctuation and sentence structure are something you could work on, like for example 'Anxiety of tomorrow' should be 'Anxieties of tomorrow' or 'Tomorrow's anxieties'. Overall though I liked it; you ...