Auteur

Thanks guys :) And The.Dreamwalker, yeah, I can't really be bothered using proper punctuation/grammar with any poems I come up with xP But thank you :)

Ndaww thank you guys! :D And rothwise, "My lips?" was like, a sort of... questioning thing. Like, doubting if his lips were going to be mine, so to speak ;) ...

Aww, thank you! ^ Haha :)

Haha PaperNessa, it's because the guy I'm talking about lives near me. :) Not with me... hahaha. Thanks for the comment anyways ^~^ Same to you Geronimo.

Thanks guys XD

Thanks, but really? Aleysha is that hard to pronounce/read? El-ee-sha. Like Aleisha...

Euh, parce que je suis en train de parler français pour Dalliance. Comme une blague, ce qui est. Je lui ai dit que j'allais prendre la parole tout en français ...

Thank you! (: I'll get down to fixing that up. It was just a rough draft^^

Not going to nitpick, since I've seen some people already have, but I do have one comment. Auteur, you said you liked the opening line, but not how it was ...

Wind cut her ears and she winced; water filling her eyes and smudging the brown inside of them. Smudging the brown inside them? What does that even mean? I have ...

I rather like this :) Not sure how you could improve it, it's too short for editing. Nice and simple as it is.

IIIIIII don't characters do ;] And thanks, I'll remove some of it.

Haha yeah ! I tried writing "Nobody's" but it wouldn't allow that . . .

Good job! One thing, and I don’t know if this is right, but I thought nurses were girls. You referred to Gabriel as a nurse. The ending was very nice! ...

JEEZ Olli! I was being in-character. An angry 14 year old boy. Go-osh. But thanks anyway :)