Aspawn

Thanks for the review! I actually didn't plan anything for the two girls; they were just supposed to be an introduction to the Fae world, but hmm... now that you ...

Thanks for the review! About the "they seem to have taken over since Alwin's time", this chapter (and future ones) actually take place in the Fae home-world, as opposed to ...

Thanks for the review! And...you guessed it! Alwin IS Annie's father! If you noticed, they both have the last name Ashworthe, as a hint.

Thanks for the review!

Thank you for the kind review! About Hopsdale, it's just the name of the small town that Alwin lives in.

Thank you! This was actually very helpful, and I'll try to edit it soon. About the adder stone, it was an old extra one Annie had lying around her house; ...

Hey, just a side note: I think the word is "shudder", not "shutter"

lol I also got that Minecrafty feel. Probably due to "enchanted cross-bow", "wolf companion", and "potions you throw that are used as weapons."

Kay, so I read this on your advice Creeper. First Impression? AAAAAAHH!!!! There's another one?!?! ...Yeah. So anyways, my overall impression was a cool, creepy (of course) story, fun to ...

about #2 actually: You don't necessarily have to listen to this. I know someone who's 5'10 at 17 years old (98th percentile, I believe). I just wanted to point out ...

Hi! I just want to point out a couple errors: 1. You call Lucille the "antagonist". Is it possible you meant the protagonist? The protagonist is the main character, while ...

Thanks! Though this doesn't have much critique, as you said, it is still nice to know that people are reading my story and really thinking about it and appreciating it.

Hey just want to say that your new and improved paragraph breaks are looking good :)

Oh my gosh, I did not realize how long this review really was! Sorry if I made you read all this!

Hey there! First impression: A little confusing (as all first chapters are), but sooo well written. I absolutely love your writing style, how you really get us inside Crudelis's head. ...