Lucille Tensin: A 12-year-old girl living in a vastly remote town called Clemmsworth She is the main protagonist of the Witches story and plays a key part in saving her town from the evil witches.
Height: 5'7
Hair color: Brown
Eye Color: Green
Ethnicity: Caucasian
Hobbies: Playing outside, having fun with her little brother, cooking, people watching, hanging out with her best friend Casey
Favorite Food: Chow Mein
Casey Robles: Lucille's best friend. 14 years old. Lives over the hill from Lucille's house. She was adopted by Archy, who is her 65-year-old grandmother.
Height: 5'3
Hair color: Originally blonde, but ever since she dyed it, it is a whole rainbow
Eye color: Blue
Ethnicity: Caucasian
Hobbies: Gossiping, reading girly magazines, doing makeovers, spending time with Lucille, baking, journaling
Favorite food: Dirty Rice
Ricky Hargrove: Ms. Girth's student. 13 years old. Mysterious boy. Unknown about his parents.
Height: 5'8
Hair color: Black
Eye color: Brown
Ethnicity: Caucasian mixed with African American
Hobbies: going places at night, reading, researching,
Favorite food: Lunchables
Anthony Tensin: 5 years old. Little brother of Lucille Tensin. Adorable.
Height: 3'7
Hair color: Brown
Eye color: Brown
Ethnicity: Caucasian
Hobbies: playing with his toys, being around his big sister, going to the park, getting into mischief
Favorite Food: Peanut Butter
Maya Tensin: Mother of Lucille and Anthony. 36 years old. Brave in the face of danger.
Height: 6'0
Hair color: Brown
Eye color: Green
Ethnicity: Caucasian
Hobbies: Staying in the house, napping when the kids are away, cooking
Favorite food: Chicken Alfredo
Archy Robles: 65 years old but young in spirit. Grandmother of the adopted Casey Robles.
Height: 5'4
Hair color: Blonde
Eye color: Blue
Ethnicity: Caucasian
Hobbies: sewing, going to her martial arts class ever Saturday, cooking and baking, tidying up the house, spending time with her granddaughter
Favorite food: Sheperd's pie
Mayor Timothy Hargrove: 45 years old. Mayor of the town. Has been missing from all public addresses up until now.
Height: 5'11
Hair color: Blonde
Eye color: Blue
Ethnicity: Caucasian
* This is character sheet 1 of some of the main characters. The next character sheet will be of the witches.
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Hi!
I just want to point out a couple errors:
1. You call Lucille the "antagonist". Is it possible you meant the protagonist? The protagonist is the main character, while the antagonist is the main villain, in short.
2. Just want to point out that a 12-year old whose 5'7 is in the 99th or 100th percentile (meaning, she is taller than 99-100% of girls her age). Maybe consider making her a bit shorter?
3. When you say Rickey Hargrove is "Unknown about his parents." What exactly does that mean. The readers don't know about his parents? He doesn't Know about his parents? His parents don't know about him? It would be helpful to clarify for us readers who know nothing about your characters save what you tell us.
Other than that, it's a cute, helpful character sheet!
A word of advice: Try not to spend too much time on character sheets and more on the actual writing (speaking from experience; I spend way too much time on character and world building and never get to writing the actual story)
Hope you found this helpful!
-Aspawn out
about #2 actually: You don't necessarily have to listen to this. I know someone who's 5'10 at 17 years old (98th percentile, I believe). I just wanted to point out that it's not very likely, but it can make a cute character trait if you write it well (such as having her look down whenever a friend talks to her).
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Top Graham Cracker - This is a character sheet featuring important characters from your story “The witches”. The witches’ character sheet has not been posted yet, but there is this for now.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - You wrote “antagonist” for Lucille when I think you meant to write “protagonist”, but that is just one little thing.
Chocolate Bar - I think that I like the description of Casey the most, because she seems like a very vibrant person. I also like that there isn’t really much revealed about Ricky, it leads me to believe that he is somewhat involved in all of this witches stuff. How much he knows about the witches will be seen later on.
Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a neat little character sheet. I will be sure to read more of this story when you get to posting it and I am excited to see what the characters will do next. And so…
I wish you a fantastic day/night! ^v^
I have a question, dove. Why didn't you make this a post in the writer's corner? Do you really want feedback and comments on what your characters are like?
Because the formatting is kinda off in this one which gives it a kinda wonky feel xd
Hm lotsa caucasians in this one. Not much else to say abt it rly other than, I can see these characters being interesting... I just wish I actually got to see it?