Asith

So, back to Alice are we? I suppose that was to be expected. Now, I don't want to be too harsh, but I have to say that this was the ...

Hello! Since this is just a snippet, and is really just a vague sort of idea rather than a developed story, I'm going to easy with my critique. In fact, ...

Hello! Considering this is a prologue, you've certainly introduced an exciting cliff-hanger, so that's that job covered! Especially towards the latter half of the story, I found myself incredibly intr

I am very pleased with the idea of varying the point of view between different main characters! This could honestly be the trope that gets the story a win from ...

Hello! Glad to read another of your stories! I'm excited to see a long, coherent story cut up into chapters from you :) I really enjoyed the way this started. ...

Here to review chapter 3 :) Firstly, I'd like to say the beginning was a bit jarring. Having just read chapter 2, I found the change in tone extremely sudden. ...

Hello again! I couldn't help but keep reading, so I thought I might as well keep reviewing this too. I'm just going to jot down my thoughts as I read, ...

God, I love when I stumble across poems that I like. It's rare, but when it happens, it's so good! I adore the way you describe things; it's metaphorical without ...

Reviewing a piece older than 2010 for the checklist challenge, I guess... Firstly, I actually like the brevity of the piece. Random short scenes with no real overarching plot can ...

Okay, I really like this premise, but let's revise it, shall we? I really really enjoyed the chapter from the introduction, to the description of the murder, to the Scottish ...

Aww, I love this! Your descriptions are easily the best part. It's hard to write to piece that readers can enjoy when there's no actual plot, but your descriptions and ...

Gonna post a review here to let you know that for something you wrote in five minutes in year nine, this is stellar! It's great that you're harsh on your ...

Hello! I actually really like this story; I'm a sucker for creepy short stories :P Here are some notes I made while reading through it, I hope they don't come ...

Hi This is many months old, but the premise is so good ! If anything, I'm posting this review to remind you that you had a good idea here, and ...

Posting a scene spoiler is such a fun concept! I know this is really old, and I know for a fact that your writing has improved since then, but I'll ...