Areida

A good start, but everything moved along really quickly. She went from being a little 6yr old (?) to more like an eight or nine year old. Several years had ...

Have at it. :D

Ooh, sorry, forgot to mention: for those of you that don't know, the history is in the prologue. If you read that, Boni, I promise it will make a lot ...

I'd definitely have to second that. It has potential, but if you're not careful you will most definitely fall into the deadly black hole of trite cliche. *shudder* But I'd ...

*shrug* Random Areida curiosity. Just a part of moi. :D

Hee hee. I like them too. I mean, they're not profound or life-altering or anything, but I like 'em. They're cute and definitely great material for have been written when ...

I know what you mean. I read both the Iliad and the Odyssey in eighth grade for my Omnibus class (Antiquity), and though the Iliad was definitely more difficult, I ...

Wow. I agree with Crys. Brilliant. I wanna be a groupie!

Hahahahhaha.... Funny... I like it...

Zat ees a good idea.

I liked Boio too. The others sound a bit too contrived.

Yeah... that line kind of threw me off too... maybe it's just because it sounds more like dialogue than something somebody would write in a note. *shrug* But you used ...

Yay for critiques! You people are seriously awesome. I'm killing the collidewithcombatboots thingy. I was trying to pull it off, but as we can all see that just didn't work ...

Yes, because you really go around shoving a piece of your soul into your mortal enemy that you would love to kill. But I thought Voldy didn't know he'd done ...

Ooh! Ooh! I wanna be in a story! Make one with me in it!