Ardor

Hmmm..... This is intriguing. Actually, if I can be perfectly honest, I don't know what to make of it. It has a good idea to it, and you have strong ...

Hey Rach :) I am sorry if this review is very unhelpful, but I shall try my best to analyse your poem. You say you hardly write poems? Are you ...

I liked what I was reading, definetely. Again, I must agree with CR that the intro was a tad bit too long. The middle section, which provided the most meat ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! You know, this is a million miles better than my first post on YWS. Oh, first off, let me introduce myself. I am 567ajt, specialist in ...

Omg! This is so lovely! I especially loved the second stanza about how you lost your love a thousand suns ago. Gave it an eternal feel, and a fine poem ...

A sequel? Why not post the original? Anyway, I could tell from the words alone this is personal. Seems very blunt and feels a little bit, maybe, TOO personal? I ...

I am reading a book. That is the best opening line I have ever read. Seriously. I also love it's simplicity and every day nature. I especially liked how you ...

Good god, this makes me hungry. I feel, understand and empathise with you about this kind of thing. I always feel tempted with food (cookies and muffins FTW!) and you've ...

Sounds interesting....but what does Incendium mean? I know it is made up, but could you explain the meaning in a PM for me? The poem is very layered and realistic. ...

Very long. Very epic though. I liked your rhetorical questions at the end, gave the piece some empthasis. I also LOVED your structure. It was you telling your story. I ...

Has a nice little twist to it which I like. I think this is really good. I am not so fond of the cat though- I think you could develop ...

I really liked this. It had a nice feel to it. I liked how you extended the lines. It gave it a real endless, decadent feel. It felt like the ...

Very motivational. Has a nice feel to it, like a political speech, or a speech by someone on the eve of battle. It also had a nice, consistent flow which ...

Hmm...interesting. Nice idea having your username as the main character. Did it pay off? Well, to be honest with you, yes and no. It had an air of adventure and ...

This is good, but I feel you might need to flesh it out longer. It seems, to be honest with you, really rushed. We're just given reasons why you killed ...