Archstormangel

I love you oh god that was such an amazing critique you are my favorite person ever you took the type to print , edit and scan oh god. I ...

I had to fit all the events into three pages; thus, the lack of description. I didn't think I needed it that bad, though. xD I'll definitely add some more, ...

I love how no one commented on how I used words to set a specific tone. D: Whatever. XD

Thanks, both of you! I'd rather keep it as get out get out get out, because I like to avoid using exclamation points, and I think it displays the fear ...

Ah, thanks so much! I'll fix those. And thanks for the encouragement, I'll rub that in his face (j/k). c For the 'She squeezed them shut' line - I didn't ...

Yeah, I figured I was too vague. It was a school assignment and my teacher told me to keep it 35 lines so I had to cram. I'll fix it ...

8D Thanks! You made my day. :P My friend told me it was boring so this certainly cheers me up. c: And Chirantha - thanks! I'm so lame. :P I'll ...

I rather couldn't follow it. It sounded as though he killed her, and then she was there... clear it up?

The Twilight series. C:

Ah, thanks so much! I'll clear that up. :3 He's Lucifer, yeah. ^^,

LOL. Build creepiness. I agree - it could use some more power, but the general poem is quite nice, and pleasant to read. ... Not in that way D:

Okay, good luck, then! Looking forward to see what you do with it. :3

The story behind this poem is sort of like this: There's someone (the person telling the story) who is having nightmares , that they call dreams, of really horrible, vicious ...

Heheh. All right, I knew there were mistakes. xDD I'll edit it. ...later.

Leja, thank you so much for what you said, and for sharing your opinion. I'm not going to change this poem because so far I've gotten a lot of positive ...