ArahniaSiddel

This is a great poem an very emotional. I am really sorry about your horse. I don't think you should change anything majior.I liked the ryhmes some of them just ...

I love this poem. I woudn't change anything, but take out the first line. I don't really think it goes with the rest of the stanza. Besides that it is ...

Honeydrops Ahoy! The sky above is blue, A deep-sea blue, The bluest blue That had ever been blue. here "had" should be has. I think The clouds are white, But ...

I am not an expert on poems so I am just some random reader. Ok, I love this. I want to see more of your writing. You may want to ...

Lions Park was about a half-mile from my house. After buying all the items on the list (I was very amazed that they even had the books), I rode my ...

I think this poem is wonderful. Even though it doesn't have a rhyming scheme you get the point across. Your stanzas don't have any flow, but you make it feel ...

O.k. I read this poem and I left with nothing but confusion. If there is some deep meaning to this poem I don't see it. I think you need to ...

Author's note: This is a little poem I thought of when I was riding in the car. I wrote it down because I'm sure everyone has had a bad meatloaf! ...

Small, gray cloud Innocent, lethargic. Depending on your reader you might want to use an easier word. Sluggish perhaps. When I read this I am not sure who your reader ...

I disagree with the others. I like the choppiness in some places, but in other places it would be good to make it more flowing. You don't have to make ...

I really like this peom, but I have a few comments in green. :) Poetry is like a Da Vinci painting. When you look you are immediately I would take ...

I love this! It shows pain without being do discriptive. It is simple and good. I need you, My painter of truth. I get why he/she needs this person, but ...

Comments in red or green It was dark. Too dark for humans to exist in. It was the feeling of darkness that plagued the world. I was lying in bed, ...

Ok first of all because everybody else is: 1. Twilight - the whole time I was thinking "is this going to get better?" 2.Lord of the Rings - way to ...

This was really good for a first poem. It kinda reminded me of Dr. Seuss's wriding style. You repeated some of the ideas, but you should be happy with what ...