AquaMarine

Hello! For me, although I agree with what people are saying about cliche-ness, it's not the subject of the poem that really bothers me, it's the way you execute that. ...

Hello! At times, this poem felt much too prose-like for me. That might be because I'm not such a fan of poems written in this style - I feel like ...

Hi there! Well, this is a rather beautiful poem. I usually enjoy poems about seemingly small and insignificant things that nonetheless are rather amazing. You write with an eloquence and ...

Hello there! Here as requested. :D Okay, so I'm not going to go into any nitpicks - I'll just give you my general thoughts. The first paragraph, I found, didn't ...

Hello! As a poem, I think this needs a little bit of work. For me, the rhyme scheme halts it a little bit - the words become a little too ...

Hello! I actually really like this poem. The way you wrote it, which was in quite a wordy way, made me think of a very charming voice telling a story, ...

Hello, Coco! Nice to see you around again. So, you asked me to take a look a the edited version - I'll see what I can do! The Elders of ...

Hello there! I don’t want life to be easy I want the chaos and the rain I want the insanity even if it brings pain Something was pointed out in ...

Woo, more writing from Jenny! You are brought from your deep slumber ing by the noise of your alarm clock. You grasp at your beautiful dreams, already fading, but catch ...

Hi there! So, firstly, I commend you on your subject choice. Not the most original, for sure, but one that usually manages to be extremely interesting. The possibilities with this ...

Hi there! My interpretation of the poem here seems to be that you're talking about Heaven? If so, then I like the way you've gone about this. It's taken an ...

Hi there! Okay, so this is an interesting poem. Nice view to write it from, too - you're tapping into that biiiig love between owners and their dogs. However, I ...

Hai, Jenny! Firstly, I think I prefer this to your hamster story. You have the tone on this one down to pat. I adore some stories written in 2nd Person ...

Hey Jenny! Sorry this is a little late. :? I never knew you wrote stories! *is excited* I didn’t care at first; it was the male, and we’d probably finally ...

Mmkay. :D So, as Grif said, this is good because it is efficient. It doesn't need the imagery, the description, that some poems do - by not using them you ...