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Re: Thorns & Roses [3]
Hey Colour Buddy! So there, I’m a man and I always will be this way, get over it,” I snapped I get what you mean, but her saying "I'm a ...
Dec 17, 2009 -
Re: And I Sleep Easier
Ooh, I really like this. For some reason it reminds me of lyrics, but I guess it can be quite a popular subject so I'm not surprised! I don't think ...
Dec 16, 2009 -
Re: Lightening In The Common Room
Hi! Well, this is kind of weird, I have to say. I understand some of the lines, but then the first lines don't quite seem to fit with it. Maybe ...
Dec 16, 2009 -
Re: Insomia - Prologue
Hey there! Welcome to YWS! Please remember that we have a 3:1 review ratio here, which means 3 reviews for every piece of your own work that you post on ...
Dec 16, 2009 -
Re: Melanie hasn't smiled since that day
I love stories written from alternative points of view! It adds a new dimension to the story which is really nice. My problem here, however, is that the personality and ...
Dec 16, 2009 -
Re: Remembering her
Hey Gun! Here to review! Nitpicks Whistling winds tell me many a ghost stories, "stories" should be "story" seeing as you added in the "a" before ghost. (Which I really ...
Dec 15, 2009 -
Re: day to day
Hey there! Here to review. Just a reminder, there is a 3:1 review ratio and it would be great it you could stick to that! Some lines in the poem ...
Dec 15, 2009 -
Re: Fading Into Reality
Hey there! Welcome to YWS, I hope that you're enjoying it so far! Please note that there is a 3:1 review ratio here; that's three reviews for every piece of ...
Dec 15, 2009 -
Re: The Girl On The Red Swing
Hey Jay! Thought that I'd review this for you. She is like the night; Gentle and calm. Is the night always really that gentle and calm? It has many different ...
Dec 15, 2009 -
Re: Thorns & Roses [2]
Hey Colour Buddy! Sorry this is a bit late, by the way. Well, I read the first chapter of this so I knew what I was reading here and I ...
Dec 13, 2009 -
Re: A Little Fantasy Chapter 2: Never Forgotten
Hey Anima! Ok, so Pink and Eli got most of my nitpicks but there is one thing that I really need to say to you. And that thing is tenses. ...
Dec 11, 2009 -
Re: A Little Fantasy Chapter 1 continuation
Hey there! Nearly finished ... :D Nitpicks: Am I happy? Because if I am happy, why don’t I look happy? She knows that she isn't happy, really. There isn't really ...
Dec 11, 2009 -
Re: A Little Fantasy Chapter 1: A New Beginning
Hey Anima! I know that you only asked for chapter two, but I wanted to do it all. Nitpicks I get up, notice the whole bedroom's a mess and I ...
Dec 11, 2009 -
Re: Of Loss and Love (chp.7) [newly edited]
Hey Coco! Last chapter, I hope that my reviews have been helpful! I have to agree with Pink here, I was totally reminded of The Duchess with this part. Not ...
Dec 11, 2009 -
Re: Of Loss and Love (chp.6) [newly edited]
Hey there! Few nitpicks: I laughed inwardly at the countless moments I had spent hoping that though my decision to marry was for the sake of my family and that ...
Dec 11, 2009