Apple

2 paragraphs of my novel. Worded properly? Review. The vessel moved through a light fog, swaying back and forth atop the rolling waves. A glistening, white moon hovered overhead in ...

Scavengers ( Scene Eight) Review: Scavengers (Scene Eight) I would bold it to make it stand out more. (We fade to an empty patch of gravel. A foot suddenly lands ...

I love you ever more Don't you mean I love you even more? And that's all the troubles I found. Other wise, nothing! I really liked this, as with your ...

LiNdSeYo1 - I want you to look at your work and see what I am seeing...cause this is GOLD! Great job, I mean it's "non-fiction"! I can hardly stand reading ...

I've never read the actual thing, (The story) but I think I will. This is really good, I like the way you made everything in depth though not as if ...

Hi!!! Apple here to some reviewing... (Hehe it rhymes!) :lol: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ “Himni,” I asked, still holding onto him as we rode unsteadily through the trees. It had been a while ...

Great job! I really liked this part. I coudln't find any mistakes with grammar or any other faults so, yeah, that excellent. If it were me, there would be so ...

Haha! :lol: It was hilarious! I would love to go to that place, it seems to awesome! Hahaha, you did make me laugh all the way through great job! ^._.^ ...

Firstly - I love your avatar picture! It's to cute! Secondly- This TO AWESOME! I don't think there is anything wrong with it. Grammar is a bummer with me too ...

Wow that drawing is amazing, as well as your writing skills. I really liked this part. I have to admit I haven't read the others (Which I am going to ...

How do I put this lightly....hmmm.......................................... This story is.....is.......is....... (Suspense SUPER FANTABULOUS GREAT AWESOME HIPPOPOTAMUS COOL TOTALLY GREAT! And that is

I haven't read the other installments of this, and that is probably why I don't know what this means. Applethwate!

Ooooo, I wouldn't want to be refusing that dude! Bang Bang Bang! Any who to the reviewing! What I write in yellow is the fix ups in green/blue is just ...

Very good, I'm not to good at reviews but I'll try my best! :D Your Idea: Is really really good. I really like this prologue and think it could end ...

This is really good! Truly, I agree with Snoik on mostly everything so I am sort of not needed! Oh by the way, Snoik I love the PIG! It's so ...