These are two paragraphs from the middle of my novel taking place during the 100 years war in the middle ages. Is this piece worded properly? What could make it better?
The vessel moved through a light fog, swaying back and forth atop the rolling waves. A white moon hovered overhead in the night sky, casting an eerie glow against the deck. Men worked silently and swiftly across the ship appearing only as shadows in the haze.
Sperling was the only being that stood motionless at the front of the ship. He peered through the thinning mist, hoping for some sign of the English fleet. He half imagined a dark silhouette moving through the fog, and more than once stirred to what seemed to be a lantern’s light in the distance… but nothing truly materialized. These false illusions were mere tricks from his anxious and exhausted mind. They were alone. Alone ever since they were separated from the main fleet, and they would sail into France unaided.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Well this an interesting piece to go through. It seems we've got a bit of an excerpt from a story rather than anything else, and it does in fact seem rather ambiguous as to where these two mentioned paragraphs here actually came from. That certainly makes for a very intriguing situation here at the start as you're now left trying to decipher what this could be about.
From what we do get here, there is a distinct sense of some sort of adventure here with the mention of this vessel and wanting to enter a place that I get the feeling the people here are perhaps not meant to be entering. That is certainly the vibe we have here, although considering how small of a part this is, that potentially doesn't mean all that much.
At any rate, this is a pretty nicely constructed pair of paragraphs here and I think they're potentially a part of something that does seem like it'd be intriguing. And that really is about all that can really be extracted from this rather small extract that you've got going here.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Thanks for the help. I will also be posting several paragraphs from a war novel that I stopped writing several weeks ago.
2 paragraphs of my novel. Worded properly? Review.
The vessel moved through a light fog, swaying back and forth atop the rolling waves. A glistening, white moon hovered overhead in the night sky, casting an eerie glow against the deck. Men worked silently and swiftly across the ship appearing only as shadows in the haze. #0000FF ">I think some of these commars could come out...but that is only me being nit picky! 
Don't talk to me! *Walks away hissily* The rudeness of some people! Anyway....this is really good, keep writing! PM when you have the next adition up.
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Sperling was the only being that stood motionless at the front of the ship. He peered through the thinning mist, hoping for some sign of the English fleet. He half imagined a dark silhouette moving through the fog, and more than once stirred to what seemed to be a lantern’s light in the distance… but nothing truly materialized. These false illusions were mere tricks from his anxious and exhausted mind. They were alone. Alone ever since they were separated from the main fleet, and they would sail into France unaided.
#0000FF ">You know, it's often polite to leave atleast one minstake so I can pick you up on it!
Grammar: Why I ought' a give you some manners for not leaving anything for me to pounce on! Aww it's not fair, your grammar is to prefect! Honestly, I couldn't find any mistake through your work! But nooo, through mine there is a gazillion on the first line!
Character:He's got an awesome name and very well in depth, like he's explainable and you know his personality! (Putting five bucks on curious)
Structure:.............
Overall: It's too good!