AnubisPineapple

Thank you all for the reviews. At first I was thinking, that was not what I wrote, then I realized. That was my first draft! I am sorry. *Akward Face* ...

I thought it was very intriguing. The characters were coloured very well. I though all together it was a nice story. Though, I think the ending was a little mushed. ...

This was awesome. I love the story of awesome, it would make a really good short film...

Drama, I loved it! Very good. We are hooked

Hey really good, but you had some run on sentences

I I loved it a lot. I thought it was really good

I really liked it. Very deep in soul