Published May 17, 2011
Some might say it is a long goodbye
Filled with sadness
And depressed sighs
All your hope is gone and passed
Mourning for your love or friend
But do not fret my dear
For once they go
They'll have peace
Far and low
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hi! I'm Pointe and I'll be reviewing you today!
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For a new member this poem is extemly good!
Congrats!
As Anubis said This is full of soul and very deep, I can see what you mean, but your not out right teling us, your letting us lead our own conclusions.
~Pointe
I really liked it. Very deep in soul
Hey Peachy!
I love this, it was short, and cute and sincere. It carried a giant backpack of emotion and delivered it straight to the porch of the reader. One problem I had, was I felt it ended a little too early. "Far and low" just seemed such an odd place to stop to me. I wish for a line or two more.... The last problem was with punctuation, it is just a pet peeve of mine.
Beyond that it was pretty much perfect, so yeah.... Hope I was of help, and let me know if you have any questions!
~HostofHorus