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I like how this is honest, like it seems to tell what happened in a very frank way. i think you should think about writing some sort of poem collection: ...

I'm dooone :) Ok, so...going to split this into chapters I think: Chapter One: - A nice opening chapter, described the characters and their relationships well, I felt like I ...

Hey Twinkle, I liked this - I don't really know anything about poetry but the rhythm that you have going on here is good and it painted a really nice ...

I like this. The level of description was good, I was able to build a picture of the scene wall and the use of the present tense is good (it ...

I want to read more. :) :) It's short, simple, tells you about what's coming after and I think once you've written it - it'll be really good. Maybe run ...

Hey, I think this could be a really good story - your description of the crime is really clear and the way that the story progresses i.e how the crime ...

So, happy to see that the characters have pasts and emotions, that added a lot to my understanding of them. I actually really liked this chapter - it had lots ...

Hi, again So, I'm still impressed with the imagery that's going on here, it made it really easy to imagine what was going on - I also like the detail ...

Hiya, So I read Chapter one and then I saw the link to the prologue. So I'll review this and then go and read them in order :) I like ...

Hi, I thought that the description and they way you built up the character of Pennet was really good - especially when he killed that person. I do think you ...

I liked the character, the whole scenario was very relatable. It would be worth you going through it and checking it for spelling and stuff at some point, because that ...

wow. this is different - I like it though. I like how...original it is with the POV changes, because it actually sounds like there are two different characters talking, rather ...

I think you could expand on this if you wanted. I liked the way that it started out as a nice cheerful sort of story until you brought Scarlet Forest ...