Anna09

Nitpicking time! I close my eyes and pretend that I’m not here, but it doesn’t work . I whisper to the wind that everything was ok, to learn to let ...

Someone else has already pointed out the grammatical mistakes that I was intending to point it. Overall, I really liked it! I think that you should expand upon this, and ...

Wow. Nice job! Normally I go through stories and tear them apart, finding too many grammatical mistakes for my sanity. Your story though? Couldn't find a mistake. The story itself ...

Funny thing is when I tried to take one of his paintings away ; you fought and screamed with all your might. A semi-colon separates two ideas, it can be ...

Normally I would go through and point out grammatical mistakes, but it seems as though someone has already beaten me to it. ;) On the story itself... I was confused ...

Hey! I saw that your story had no comments, so I thought I would give my thoughts. Please note they are only my thoughts, feel free to throw them out ...

Normally I would go line by line and give you every little grammar problem that I see, but it seems like someone's beat me to the punch. Overall, I really ...

First off, I loved the prologue! It was well written, and it caught my attention. Good job. :) F rom the first moment I knew that this wasn't going to ...

Matthew was a big man, a strong man , with a dramatic black beard and a naturally commanding voice. I think that's a bit awkward. It would sound better if ...

Okay! *rubs hands together* Let's see what I can find... “I don’t think we should continue being together . “ H e said calmly. Right off the bat you have ...

Hey! So I'm going to tear your prologue apart...'cause that's what I do. :D Of course, feel free to throw anything I say out, most of it is simply my ...

Hello! Looks like I'll be the first one to review. :D Nendo stood in the midst of the bustling crowd, his eyes trained on the blue sky spread above him. ...

*rubs hands together eagerly* I see that no one has yet gone through here and pointed out every little grammatical fault, which I will gleefully do now. Sorry, I just ...

Hello! So, the Egyptian thing totally caught my eye, so I came to see what it was :) When her eyes re focused on the dance studio Hm. I assumed ...

Every bone in my body ached . B ones I didn’t know I had were screaming at me to stop running, for the love of Stikle, stop running. Dota and ...