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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: No Smoke Without Fire

    Dear anna91423, This poem has real emotional appeal and is very discriptive, which are two really god things for poems to have. I loved it!!! One thing you can improve ...

    Jun 5, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Distant Chains

    Dear KatTrain , Wow! This poem left me utterly speechless! It is o good! I find creeping, crawling ways to miss the spices of your skin I absolutely love the ...

    Oct 23, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Course and Destination

    Dear murtuza , To be honest this form of poetry isn't my specialty. However, this piece is exceptionally unique and interesting. I love it!!! Here's the story, of two young ...

    Oct 23, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Two Beauty's That Match

    Dear kaylamarie004, Its like a sixth sense I carried though his presence I suggest you revize the way this is phrased maybe you meant, "It's like a sixth sense I ...

    Oct 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Smoke Screen

    Dear amygabb , Smoke Screen I stand, proud, Surrounded by the shambles of my glass house. I love the metaphor!! Glinting off the splinters, I glimpse the reflection of my ...

    Oct 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: the depths

    Dear darchoco , I keep swimming in this blackened water deeper than hell, currents stronger than pain, but I tire. My mind cries for rest, My body only obeys, My ...

    Oct 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Dream on.

    Dear Mikko , I love it and understand it perfectly!! I wouldn't change a thing! I love the symbolism and deepness of the piece. I feel how you feel which ...

    Oct 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Self-Portrait

    Dear Arwen, I love this poem!! You are a good writer. If you follow the directions stated by the others: You will be an even better writer. :) -AnAmericanTeenager

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Noose

    Dear EtCetera, This poem is filled with intense emotions. That is what I like most about it. I feel like the others have pretty much said it all. I just ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Screwed Me Over from the Start

    Dear dragonlover92, I love this poem!! I love how it turned the tables at the end. There is no things that i can see that need to be improved. Perfect ...

    Aug 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: god

    Dear writingabook200, I love this poem. You are such a good poet. I love the repetition in this piece. But if I were you I would right the poem in ...

    Aug 26, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Bronze Challenges

    Dear psudiname, Are you going to turn this story into a novel? If not you should. You are a great writer!! There is nothing that needs improvement, at least not ...

    Aug 26, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: You don't care

    (: I love this song!!!!! It is great! It is easy to relate to! I feel like I understand what you are going through. There are some things that could ...

    Aug 22, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Guardian Angel

    This is such a sweet story. I really enjoyed reading it. You are such a good writer. I feel like this story just abruptly ended, though. It's almost as if ...

    Aug 22, 2011


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