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Re: No Smoke Without Fire
Dear anna91423, This poem has real emotional appeal and is very discriptive, which are two really god things for poems to have. I loved it!!! One thing you can improve ...
Jun 5, 2012 -
Re: Distant Chains
Dear KatTrain , Wow! This poem left me utterly speechless! It is o good! I find creeping, crawling ways to miss the spices of your skin I absolutely love the ...
Oct 23, 2011 -
Re: Course and Destination
Dear murtuza , To be honest this form of poetry isn't my specialty. However, this piece is exceptionally unique and interesting. I love it!!! Here's the story, of two young ...
Oct 23, 2011 -
Re: Two Beauty's That Match
Dear kaylamarie004, Its like a sixth sense I carried though his presence I suggest you revize the way this is phrased maybe you meant, "It's like a sixth sense I ...
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: Smoke Screen
Dear amygabb , Smoke Screen I stand, proud, Surrounded by the shambles of my glass house. I love the metaphor!! Glinting off the splinters, I glimpse the reflection of my ...
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: the depths
Dear darchoco , I keep swimming in this blackened water deeper than hell, currents stronger than pain, but I tire. My mind cries for rest, My body only obeys, My ...
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: Dream on.
Dear Mikko , I love it and understand it perfectly!! I wouldn't change a thing! I love the symbolism and deepness of the piece. I feel how you feel which ...
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: Self-Portrait
Dear Arwen, I love this poem!! You are a good writer. If you follow the directions stated by the others: You will be an even better writer. :) -AnAmericanTeenager
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: My Noose
Dear EtCetera, This poem is filled with intense emotions. That is what I like most about it. I feel like the others have pretty much said it all. I just ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Screwed Me Over from the Start
Dear dragonlover92, I love this poem!! I love how it turned the tables at the end. There is no things that i can see that need to be improved. Perfect ...
Aug 26, 2011 -
Re: god
Dear writingabook200, I love this poem. You are such a good poet. I love the repetition in this piece. But if I were you I would right the poem in ...
Aug 26, 2011 -
Re: The Bronze Challenges
Dear psudiname, Are you going to turn this story into a novel? If not you should. You are a great writer!! There is nothing that needs improvement, at least not ...
Aug 26, 2011 -
Re: You don't care
(: I love this song!!!!! It is great! It is easy to relate to! I feel like I understand what you are going through. There are some things that could ...
Aug 22, 2011 -
Re: Guardian Angel
This is such a sweet story. I really enjoyed reading it. You are such a good writer. I feel like this story just abruptly ended, though. It's almost as if ...
Aug 22, 2011
