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Re: Ten Secrets *A Poem For School*
This poem is so true! That is, if it's about what I think it's about. But, anyway, as far as the form of it goes, it's pretty good. The rhythm ...
May 20, 2010 -
Re: Anywhere But...
I agree with you that Speak was a very good book, but I don't remember any of the specifics of it right now, so don't base my review on that. ...
May 20, 2010 -
Re: Luna 5
This is really good writing. I'm assuming it's a chapter from a book you're writing? Your descriptions are really good, especially the scene where she fights the bear. The only ...
May 20, 2010 -
Re: 1 wish
I'm guessing that since you wrote this so long ago that your writing has improved since then, but it's nice to go back and look at old things you've written. ...
May 20, 2010 -
Re: The Meetinghouse (Prologue)
Wow, I loved this! I don't know if it's exactly "old-style" language, but whatever kind of language it is, I like it. Your descriptions are so strong, I could literally ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: Unknown Name (Sorry)
I liked this story. It was cute and sweet and easy to understand, even if it is a little cliche. Everyone likes a little bit of that every once in ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: my burden
I liked the beginning of this poem, but I liked it less as I kept reading. I'll just go line by line (I'll make my suggestions in red ) : ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: La luna e Bella (My vamp book)
To be honest with you, I really didn't want to read this. From the title, it sounded to me like it was going to be another Twilight. But it definitely ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: The Re-Creation Comet
I like this piece as a outline or an idea, but it isn't exactly a story. It needs to be beefed up a little bit to go as far as ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: Body and Spirit
There were some parts of this poem that I really liked and I loved how they rhymed, for example: People keep asking questions about where you go when you die, ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: Lamp
Wow this is really cool! I would have never thought to arrange a poem like that! And on top of that, the poem itself isn't bad. It reminds me of ...
May 17, 2010 -
Re: To the Slaughter, to the Bed
I'm going to have to be the odd one out of the bunch and say that I liked this. It's not solid, if you understand that, it's more on the ...
May 17, 2010 -
Re: The Fool
Thanks for the warning about this being really dark. I'm sure I'll have nightmares :) Other than having no idea whatsoever what was going on in this (probably because I ...
May 17, 2010 -
Re: DELETED
When I was reading the beginning of this, I thought I wasn't going to like it (because I don't normally like stories that are all hardcore or involve gangs and ...
May 17, 2010 -
Re: I Would Apologize, Sir
I really like this too! As I started reading it, I thought I knew exactly what it was going to be about (which could be a good thing or a ...
May 16, 2010
