Amniel

Hmm... This song seems to have a clear point, and you are conveying it in an attention hugging way. The only think that popped into my mind (as you asked ...

Good work Robert! This is, in my opinion, by far the best you've done so far. It has a good meaning to it, and flows well. Well, unfortunately, there are ...

This poem had a good (in this case sad) atmosphere that was carried out well, and you used your metaphors better than in your earlier poems. The flow is mostly ...

Hmm... I think I like this the most of all your lyrics. Just a personal preference, of course. The rhyming is good, sometimes even great, the song flows quite smoothly, ...

This song was... a bit extreme I might say. It feels really, really angry, but I think that's what you try to achieve here. Some of the rhyming is off, ...

This was already a lot better than your first poem. It is longer, though not unnecessarily long, it has better rhyming, and flows better. in this great city that has ...

hmm... the poem was nothing special, but nothing especially bad either. It does strike me however that some lines are considerably shorter than the others. For example: What is it ...

I already did the nitpicks earlier, and like I said then, there isn't much to fix. First of all, I liked the way you describe action, way better than I ...

thank you for the review Demeter. I'll nix those things you mentioned and then tell Anssi to change those parts. We have different characters just so that the writing style ...

Here as promised. I will not review this considering it as a thirteen year old's work, as I was such two weeks ago, and age is never a valid excuse ...

Chapter 1 “Maeve!” Maeve pulled herself away from her desk and leaned over the stair banister. “YES?” she called back, her mind still full of her essay, now nearly finished ...

I didn't get the last line...but on the other hand It's 00.44 in Finland and I'm very tired which could affect me. I like the rhyming, as it works well ...

Hello, here as promised. First of all, I really liked this. The story flowed very well, and there were but a few awkward sentences. The descriptions were often quite good, ...

Ok again Sakura has said most of the issues, and I agree this is less confusing, but still the reader has no idea what is going on. Again it is ...

A lot of my critique is the same as Sakura's (damn you Sakura for being here first). First of all it was short. It felt rushed, as it was short, ...