This song was... a bit extreme I might say. It feels really, really angry, but I think that's what you try to achieve here. Some of the rhyming is off, and a few lines feel forced.
this is one example, it sounds weird and you can't help but get the feeling the line was forced to fit in.But you over and over rip my veins
I liked this part the most, it rhymed better than most of the song, and felt less forced.They will try to kill your inner emotions!
Don’t let them stop you with their pity commotions!
Stand up for yourself, for your friends!
Don’t let them win the haunts!
Those sorry ass cunts!
Do what you think is good!
Complete the rite!
Win the fight!
Like I said, this was a really angry song, but I think it was supposed to be. Still, this isn't my style of music, but I believe you did well for a song of that type. Keep on the good work Robert
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