AmethystNight

This is fantastic, again. I am really loving this story. Bella is a great character and I am really glad that we got some back story one her and Dylan ...

This looks quite interesting. Here are a few grammatical things that you might want to take a look at to improve the piece. People think that the world of the ...

This is great. I'm really enjoying the story though where you ended it made me very upset because now I want to know what happens next. You created tension really ...

This a good piece. You have some good description here and mix it with the thoughts of the character quite well. I have a few gramatical things that I'll point ...

This is a good story with realistic characters. It's a very touching story and the reader really feels for the characters. Your description is great, with a nice use of ...

This is fantastic. It's really moving. I like how you repeatedly mention the hunger to show how it weighs on her mind. Even though this is only a short piece, ...

Char squeezed my shoulder reassuringly, pushing me further inside, shutting the door behind us. Again, here I would use an and instead of the second comma. Rather short, plump, with ...

Again, a great piec of writing. I really like your style and find your main character very easy to relate to. Your speach is very good, helping to create believable ...

This is great. You really build the suspense and make me feel for the characters. I am very intrigued about who Zandyr is and where he's gotten this baby from. ...

Firstly, I think this is good for a prologue and like the fast pace. The job of a prologue is to give a clue to the story to come and ...

I like your writing style - it's nice and easy to read. You create quite a laid back tone that reflects your character well. I understand that you are trying ...

Your plot seems quite interesting and I like that you are teasing the audience without giving too much information away. I also like you keep some mystery about the character. ...

Yet again, I love it. I seriously adore your characters and am very glad that we've gotten some back story on them in this chapter. The way they interact is ...

Hi, so, noticing chapter two, I decided to read this and thought that while I was here I'd give you a little review. Firstly, I loooooove dragons, so this instantly ...

A great addition to the story as always. By the way, I can definitely relate to the typo problem - I always write too fast, read back what I've written ...