AlyssaKyle

This was a well put together poem. Although you sturggled a bit with the rhyming in the second stanza, they rhyme scheme was consistant throughout, as was the stanza structure ...

The only thing that bothered me was the rhyming/rhyme scheme. You had a pattern going, and then all of a sudden it would break and throw off the flow of ...

I certainly do not inted to rip this apart, becuase the writng does not warrant that. I would like for you to let us see some more of the world ...

I enjoyed this overall. I would have liked to see some more indirect characterization in the beggining instead of just telling us what they looked like. I wanted to know ...

I do not believe that your lines need to end neatly with a punctuation mark, It's one of the rules of peotry that you can do that. Personally, I am ...

Despite your request, I do not intend to tear this to shreds. I quite liked it. Okay, nit-picking time! It's 'pajamas' not 'pyjamas'. Also, don't be afraind to use pronouns ...

Thank you for tkaing the time to write this out and post it. It's bad enough that kids my age are acting like this. I think there are a lot ...

I felt a natural rythm as I read this, which is always a very good thing. Personally, I felt that the structure was a bit scattered. I found it hard ...

I freaking love this Missy!It took me a few minutes to realize that Mike and Cam were the same person. This is definitely a unique idea that I never would ...

I have to disagree with the other reviews you have recieved so far in the sense that I enjoy the way you used repetition. It emphasizes your point, and though ...

Hey there! I am a big supporter of authors using rhyme scheme and overall structure however they want to, becuase that is the point of poetry. However, I was a ...

I love this poem, especially thebeginning of it. the rhyme scheme flowed very well and did not feel forced at all like it often can. I like poems that switch ...

In general, I enjoyed this poem. I must admit that the frequent changes in rhyme scheme threw me a bit, but I don;t know whether you had a specific purpose ...

I appreciate your willingness to try such a new and difficult style! I was a little confused at some points, but overall I think you did a pretty good job ...

i like the message behind this. I think it is okay that the poem has no stanzas. It's our poem and you can do what you want with it in ...