Published February 7, 2009
I know things are hard now
I know things are hard to take in
I know your heart is sinking in
I know your mind is think- ing
What am I going to do?
What am I going to say?
What will I make of this day?
What will happen, what will take place?
What will I have to face?
People and their faces seem to always bring me down
They always frown upon me
They're drowning me, drowning me
Why can't I just be me
Not somebody else, I wanna be who I am what I am who I want to be
Why do they always take me down? Why do they always drag me out?
Make me who THEY want me to resemble
I don't like they way I've been assembled
I just want to tear myself apart
Show my heart, show my heart
Show who I really am
I know things are hard now
I know things are hard to take in
I know your heart is sinking in
I know your mind is think- ing
What am I going to do?
What am I going to say?
What will I make of this day?
What will happen, what will take place?
What will I have to face?
Can you help me?
I don't know who I'm supposed to be
I want to be me, but so many disguises have hidden the real underneath
I can't even think for myself
I can't even fight for myself
I can't do anything for myself because this is not me
this is not me, this is not who I'm supposed to be.
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I can't really think of a title. I've been trying but haven't come up with one that seems to fit with the lyrics of the song. Could you help?
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You need to add more punctuation, The song was kinda short for me. But it was really fun to read, I enjoyed your song. But if it is a heavy metal or rock song this song is even better. LOL, I am just jokeing, but I do love metal! You desrve a star!
I'm so sorry. So sorry. I knew this girl once. I knew her.
I felt a natural rythm as I read this, which is always a very good thing. Personally, I felt that the structure was a bit scattered. I found it hard to nail down where the chorus was. Of course, it is entirely up to how you want your song set up. I just personally like to follow a pattern. I like how the person in the song seems to be at a crossroads-they know they aren't being true to themselves, but they seem a bit afraid to do something to change that, questioning every possibility of what could happen next. Very nice job.
Cooolll
I am so glad I looked at this! I would love to hear it as a song! I can totally relate to it, and you're really, really good. When it goes:
that really gets me. I love it. I love the style of it, original as well.
Hmm.. thanks, I think I will actually use that title. Yeah, I have a different style with songs sometimes. I sing it while I'm typing/writing it down. =) Thanks again!
Title? Hmm...
"Who I'm Supposed To Be"?
Anyway...
This was actually very good! As usual, it's hard to find rhythm when you can't hear it, so I found a couple kinks. Just make sure it works in your tune and this will be great.