AlyTheBookworm

Thanks for the review! 1) It actually is part of the first chapter, but I titled it "Prologue" because it was so short and only a small part of the ...

"My sister was balanced on top of the bridge railing, arms outstretched, hair whipped back by the wind heavy with the night%u2019s first drops of rain," is the part where ...

Thanks for the review and advice MJ! About the title, I completely forgot about there being a movie with the same name and the "fall" is when she moves on ...

I probably should've left out "Auri" and "Vallas". The story is set in the fantasy world I made up, where Auri is the name of their goddess and Vallas is ...

I probably should've left out "Auri" and "Vallas". The story is set in the fantasy world I made up, where Auri is the name of their goddess and Vallas is ...

That twist!! xD I was expecting another tragic romance poem until I read those last few lines and burst out laughing. Though I don't have time at the moment for ...

Thank-you for the review Sathalha! :D Glad you liked it, and I can definitely agree with that con. Written more for fun than to have a complete structure, but if ...

Thanks for the comment! :)

Just read over it, and though the plot is a LOT different from before, it's a huge improvement in terms of drama, I think. Love it. :)

Thanks so much for the review! You said a lot of helpful stuff and it'll definitely help improve Luminous. :)

I'm debating on whether I should bring the noblewoman back later for something else, but yeah, her purpose here was to get Ryn into the shop. Maybe I'll cut down ...

Thanks for the review! I am a huge Sanderson fan- but I had no idea that "Rust and Ruin" was from his books. I thought I had been the first ...

Your welcome!

Thanks for the review feather! I'll be sure to take that comma out. :)

You're welcome! :D