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That's sad. You wrote this so very well and you start reading and get pulld in before you even know it. Great job. :)

I think it's freakin hysterical. Teh cow and Muhammad! Oh couldn't hold it in and then the games and the crusades! OMG that was too much. I love you. I ...

I loves it!! I want to frame it in my house! Seriously though it was good and bravo on haveing the courage to tackle such a terribly volitile consept.

It's a good why of introduceing. Though you could just have this being the opening of the first chapter. It's a great way to draw in the readers. I think ...

Thanks! I see what you mean and I never catch much when I read my own stuff. some things are a bit vague but fear not. Everything will become clearer. ...

I finally wrote on this again. Not sure what it's gonna be now. It's like when you meet a girl and you do something stupid cause you're both drunk well ...

I cant stop laughing. I really cant. I was fine until Jack showed up. So so funny.

Funny! I love it. I cant help but giggle.

I'm a Fantasy Writer. White glowing orbs are so very nessecary or i go into a coma and wake up a few hours later. and all my love stories end ...

I have goosebumps.....I am quite frightened. I want to read more. Nice little piece. Good luck with your novels :)

Well. There will definantly be more. I was going for the whole just enough info to make you want to read and continue to get the whole story. As for ...

Thanks for the honesty....

Thanks. This just kind of happened. I was sitting in class and got out a piece of paper and this si what happened. I'm working more and i just don't ...

One of my many hobbies: 255. Think outside the box on all occasions Thanks for the comment.

The first paragraph shows that you have thought it through which is good but i want to see more. This paragraph is nice but the real question is: D oes ...